By the end of the hour, post 300-500 words on our class blog about your topic. Answer the following questions in your 300-500 words:
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4/25/2019 12:29:47 pm
Track does not only have many benefits like helping people learn sports man-ship, how to deal with losing a game, etc. It also keeps people from procrastinating and can relive stress for many.
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Kayla LaFleur
4/26/2019 11:33:07 am
I believe that cheerleading is a sport, and it should be called a sport. Big bows, short skirts and bright lipstick is not the only thing we are about. We are about strength, power, and pep. We have long practices, with blood, sweat and tears. Hundreds and hundreds of dollars spent on nike pros and cheer shoes. Early morning practices and miles of running. Legs burning, and heads pounding. Does this not sound like every other sport? Is it because we have to dress up and smile cheesily? We have more to us. I have got hurt at practice so much. We throw girls and tumble and jump. We do not have any time to slack, our lives our in each others hands. I feel as though too many people make cheer seem like a joke and it is not. Football players like to say that we are weak, but they throw a ball and we throw girls? There is more injuries in cheerleading than most sports. We use every part of our bodies, even our face muscles. We do not just use our feet or our arms. We do not just hit a ball or kick one. We run and jump and use power. We deal with so much hate and still hold our heads high. Many people do not understand the stress of practicing for months and months to perform on a mat for two minutes. We have so much to worry about in such a short period of time. No matter what though, we never give up. We know the dangers of what we do, and how we do it.
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LT
5/6/2019 08:47:52 am
I think that your thesis should be flipped: Big bows, short skirts and bright lipstick is not the only thing we are about. We are about strength, power, and pep: I believe that cheerleading is a sport, and it should be called a sport.
LT
5/6/2019 08:44:41 am
I think this is a good start. I don't know that many people would argue with you that the first part of your thesis could be argument--I don't think that it's much of a stretch to say that a sport teaches sportsmanship (losing gracefully is part of that), but I can see how this would be a part of your thesis and your paper. The second half the part about not procrastinating and relieving stress. I see that as arguable. I’ll be curious what research you find. What could be interesting in this part is proving that this sport helps you learn things that help you in life beyond sports—that might be an interesting direction to take the piece in.
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Jayden Lapointe
4/26/2019 11:27:04 am
I care about cheerleading because it has become such a big part of my life. Freshmen year I decided that I wanted to be part of a team. Not only any team but a team full of diversity and support. Having diversity between people and diversity with in the things we do as a whole.
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LT
5/6/2019 08:49:20 am
I don't know that I would say that people should care about cheerleading is a good thesis. It would be very hard to prove. To prove that it should be taken seriously as a sport, that's more realistic. And it looks like you've already located some research that helps you prove it.
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sara Pavao
4/26/2019 11:31:07 am
illegal immigrants deserve the same rights as U.S born citizens because they have more risks, and they won't have anything to fall in if they fail education wise.
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LT
5/6/2019 08:53:09 am
This is one of those super controversial topics I suggested you avoid. This is a very general and very hard argument to make in five pages. First off, we typically try not to call humans "illegal." The term used is "undocumented immigrants." Why would they deserve the same right as US citizens? And what do you mean they have more risks? And what are those risks and why does that mean that they should be given the same rights? And what rights exactly are you talking about? You've got a part here about education, but I'm not clear how that is related. Are you saying that undocumented citizens should be able to take advantage of public school? Even College? Like I said, this is super vague and will be difficult to prove. You need to narrow your thesis to one particular "right" and you will have to spend a good deal of your paper demonstrating why those folks who say they don't deserve these rights are actually wrong.
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Ashlee
4/26/2019 11:32:12 am
One of the biggest discussion in our ocean life, and how our ocean life is decreasing due to harmful produces such as plastic, rubber, oil. We have watched countless videos of how turtles get stuck in plastic or wraps that was dumped in the ocean or whales washing up on beaches filled to the brim in plastic, rubber, and chemical waste.
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LT
5/6/2019 08:58:17 am
This is your thesis: and how our ocean life is decreasing due to harmful produces such as plastic, rubber, oil.
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Deirdre Duarte
4/26/2019 11:34:02 am
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LT
5/6/2019 09:07:54 am
Your thesis is somewhere in here: Marvel has a habit of producing gorgeous films for this generation to devour, but the music behind the action often get ignored or pushed to the side by the flashy special effects.
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Ethan Souza
4/26/2019 11:36:34 am
College sports is one of the best things in my life, I watch it on a daily basis. Its something Ive bet money on and watch year round. Either basketball in the winter, baseball in the spring or football in the fall I watch them all. I care about it because these athletes will be the future stars we watch for all sports.
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LT
5/6/2019 09:11:06 am
So thing is, you don't actually say what your thesis is. You tell me you like to watch college sports. You tell me that you aren't going to play college sports. You tell me that college athletes make a a lot of money for the schools they play for and that they do so at risk to their bodies and that they might not make a lot of money after college. But you never say what your argument is. I know you think that college athletes should be paid. The trick for your thesis is to focus in on the why--it can't be huge and vague. It's only a five page paper. So what specific reason or reasons do you think that college athletes should be paid? And why are the people who say they shouldn't be paid wrong? That's your challenge.
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Tajaun aubin
4/26/2019 11:37:16 am
A large majority of young kids and young adults today spend a lot of their time playing videogams either if it be portable or a console. I feel like the young child category of the people that are into video games can get affected the most by it. Young aged kids will play a video game having fun but at the same time observing what goes on in the game.The children usually will observe and learn things that are going on around them and most kids playing video games can find a change in the child after enough observation of what there paying attention to.What people should be concerned about is what type of video game could end up changing the individual child in a positive way or in a negative way.
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LT
5/6/2019 09:14:42 am
So here is the closest thing to a thesis that I see here: What people should be concerned about is what type of video game could end up changing the individual child in a positive way or in a negative way.
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Nathaniel Raposa
4/26/2019 11:39:28 am
Baseball is arguably one of the hardest sports and requires some of the most focus and quick reactions.
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LT
5/6/2019 09:17:57 am
So the part of your thesis that is sort of missing is are there people who say playing baseball is the easiest sport to play? Easier than golf? it seems like your thesis is saying that its hard not necessary because of the physical demands it places on players, but the mental focus and physical precision it requires. Is that right? Or is it also hard on players physically? I'm interested in the idea that people should care about this out of respect. Not sure it will work, but I'm interested. Also, could consider that we should care because we say this is our national pastime, and what does it say about us if we don't respect the game?
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Laura Andrade
4/26/2019 01:00:48 pm
Some people think that mentoring is just giving orders but actually mentoring is about the connection and the growth of the student.
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LT
5/6/2019 09:23:00 am
I would say that the research you found and the stuff you say in that paragraph are about the benefit of mentoring, but it is not about the kind of mentoring that young people need--so not bullying or giving directions but, instead, guiding and supporting. So that makes sense to me as a thesis, but you want to keep in mind that this is where your research should be focused. You might need to change those words a little bit to help you find search terms for your topic. You'll see when you start to do serious research.
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brayden bustin
4/29/2019 10:47:46 am
Eminem is the single greatest rapper of all time. This argument is not only about his personal accolades and album sales, it digs deeper into his life and skillset which separates him from all other rappers. Eminem grew up with a very difficult past, having to deal with many bullies at a young age, causing him to move from school to school. Although I only transfered schools once in my life, I had to deal with bullying in middle school. That is what relates me to Eminem and why I care about this topic so much. With Eminem going through many tough times, such as dealing with an alcoholic mother and having no father growing up, he makes music that can relate to peoples troubles. He makes music for all of my moods and is a rapper that I think anyone with a good taste of rap music can listen to. I have been listening to Eminem for years now. I have been a big fan of his music and just him as a person and has influenced me as a person. I have researched him and watched documentaries about him and feel I know a lot about the great rapper. Other rappers have a lot of respect for him and talk of him as the greatest of all time.
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LT
5/6/2019 09:25:17 am
So the only thing that I'll say is that this is an excessive statement. I think that an easier argument to make is that he is one of the greatest rappers of all time.But, more than that, I need for you to tell me why. Very specifically. You talk about how his life was hard and that you like to listen to him, but none of that is about why he's the greatest rapper of all time. you'll find research that supports this, but you'll also find research that says the opposite. You'll need both and you'll need to reasonably argue by those who say he is not a great rapper--or not the greatest rapper--are wrong.
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Dylan Carvalho
5/6/2019 09:29:41 am
I care about the history behind the bicycle because bicycle motocross has had such an impact on my life. When I was younger, just like 94% of the United States, I learned how to ride a bike. My uncle told me that if I ever want to be good at riding I need to learn on a BMX and I need to go fast. He used to say “the faster you go, the smoother the ride” and he was right. Just the feeling of the wind smacking my face and the adrenaline from falling and getting right back up to keep on going got me into bicycle motocross.
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Zaraq Khan
5/18/2019 08:08:31 pm
I care about money management because money is everything, to put it simple you just can't live without money period. That's why it is really really important to understand how to manage your money, how to keep track of it and how to spend it wisely. People do seem to care about money and certainly want more and more but I don't see many people especially teenagers making wise choices that will help them grow financially and or not go into debt and achieve financial independence. Other people should care about it because-once again “Money is Everything” here is what I mean by that if you don't have money you can't afford a house, you can't afford a car, you can't afford your children, your children's education, going out to eat or your bills or vacation or you probably can't even afford to retire, there are so many things you can do if you have money and it's really important to know how to spend it wisely and how to save wisely. My experience was that I used to spend so much money on things that I didn't need I would just buy anything that I wanted on the day that I got my check and didn't care about how important it was to have at least an emergency fund that you can rely on, after some time I started realizing that I can't reach my future goals of opening up a business if I keep spending my money like this, so I made a plan that I will only spend a certain amount of money that I keep in my checkings account and everything else that I don't need will go into my savings account and that helped me out a lot. I agree with all the websites related to money management, literally every single website related to money management will explain to you how to save/manage your money or advise you to certain websites that can help you save and that's why i’m in their favour.
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