Use this space to:
1. Post your working draft of your grant. I know it's weird to post your entire grant as a comment, but do it anyway. No, it won't look pretty, but it will work. 2. As part of your post, tell people what you want help with--what you are worried about, what you are not sure is clear, what might sound goofy. 3. Respond: Pick two people. Read with care. Reply in a comment to their request for help and any other information that you think might help them. Be useful. Once you've seen that a person has been responded to twice, move on to someone who has not been responded to. I'd like for everyone to be read by two people. 4. When you turn in your grant to me for comments, please print out the comments you got from your colleagues and turn that in along with your rough draft (this post), your final draft, and the in-class drafting work you did on 4 November 2015 (not everyone will have that since so few of you were actually in class). 5. I'll lurk on this site and comment when it's appropriate, like I did last time.
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Tori Gervais
11/11/2015 01:05:18 pm
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Tori Gervais (Pt 2)
11/11/2015 01:07:53 pm
It cut off so here's the rest
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David Manning
11/11/2015 01:52:14 pm
Tori, I love the idea of the community garden so much that I decided to choose it as well. I like how you detailed everything out in the budget instead of rough estimates and basic names. I'm not a fan of using the anxiety and depression statistics to start off the grant because it doesn't feel right to me. That's only my opinion I'm sure other's feel differently. I'm not 100% on this but I think BSU has puppy therapy days where students can play with them. I don't see anything "therapeutic" about gardening. I'm sure students will agree that playing with puppies is better than gardening. I love the idea of the community garden but I think it's the wrong argument to help with the proposal.
Patrick McGuinness
11/11/2015 08:08:51 pm
Tori,
David Manning
11/11/2015 01:33:16 pm
Bridgewater State University has focused on improving its classrooms, technology, and even water fountains over the past decade. BSU consistently has had a clean and beautiful campus with the groundskeepers making sure the BSU sign outside Tillinghast Hall looks gorgeous with bright flowers. It’s always nice to have things look great from the surface. However, it is also nice to make additions that have a purpose and meaning behind them
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David Manning
11/11/2015 01:36:19 pm
Budget
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Deanna Haas
11/11/2015 01:48:23 pm
Hi guys, I'm mostly concerned about the angle of my proposal. I think the recycling program is a really good thing, and it would only be the start to a more rigorous green program on campus. In my proposal I outlined how the grant would provide a great starting point, and where the program might take us in the future. I don't have many costs other than the recycling bins and some materials for promotional items, so if you think of any I might've missed, let me know. I'm also still brainstorming a name for the program/club.
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Elizabeth West
11/12/2015 06:11:16 pm
Deanna - How will the program work in terms of getting the recycled product to the proper waste facility? Will BSU administration be involved? If so, how do you go about getting the buy in from administration before you submit the grant proposal. Maybe there is a Bridgewater recycle truck that will come to campus to pick up the bins....maybe they will provide the bins for free? Students may need to take the bin to the curb on a specific day to get it picked up and then return it to its designated position? Just a few things I thought of when I read your post. I like "A Greener BSU"
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Deanna
11/16/2015 03:24:17 pm
Elizabeth -- I appreciate the feedback. I thought about having the members of the recycling club responsible for taking bins in and out--we had a program like that at my high school. But I wasn't sure if we had to go into the specifics of the execution of the program in the grant. I assumed BSU admin would just be involved. All things to think about though!
Yuexin Ma
11/17/2015 06:20:47 pm
Deanna, the only thing I am curious about is how the food waste will be sent to local farms. I mean, will the local farms agree to be responsible for the shipping? After all, I believe the price of shipping may be higher than the price of getting some "food waste". Maybe the shipping expense budget need to be taken into account.
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Yuexin Ma
11/11/2015 03:52:02 pm
SUMMARY:
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Yuexin Ma
11/11/2015 03:52:52 pm
4. Closer Relationship between the Hot Cup & BSU
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Elizabeth West
11/12/2015 06:23:27 pm
Yuexin, I think that getting the bikes donated is a wonderful idea. I am not sure Hot Cup would provide a discount to those that donate the bike. I believe the locks and helmets should be the responsibility of the rider (if they are traveling outside of the BSU campus). The idea of a bike share in New England should be considered seasonal because of the winter months. I think this is a lovely idea and could benefit the BSU community. Maybe the monies being spent on locks and helmets could be put into the maintenance tools....this is a great idea to have a bike repair place on campus.
Yuexin
11/17/2015 02:54:53 pm
Elizabeth, I agree with the idea that "the locks and helmets should be the responsibility of the rider". However, it's impossible for the users to offer the locks when they rent the bikes, isn't it? And actually I have considered the repair station, but it costs too much due to the professional tools. Instead, we can offer some simple tools such as Wrench Set. The idea of adjusting the length of renting seasonally is quite creative. Considering the limited fund, during the winter months, maybe we should close the outdoor locations in order to keep the fleet in good shape.
Patrick McGuinness
11/11/2015 09:33:21 pm
Summary :
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Brenna R
11/13/2015 02:02:13 pm
Patrick,
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Deanna
11/16/2015 03:27:06 pm
Patrick -- I think what you have to think about is how you're going to angle this towards the people providing the grant, the owners of the Hot Cup. Why would they want to give their money to this program? I'm not sure how much traffic this would get rid of, as most of the traffic near campus is due to commuters. Most people who commute (unless they live closeby) are not going to ride a bike to class--they simply have to drive there because it's too far. I think this is an awesome idea, I would just think about reworking some of your angle. For example, you could provide even more details about the exercise benefits of the idea. Get creative with it!
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Elizabeth West
11/12/2015 06:43:37 pm
I am hopeful to get some suggestions on how things work on campus....I have never lived in a dorm on campus so I am really guessing at how this type of a program would truly work.
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Brenna R
11/13/2015 01:54:47 pm
Elizabeth,
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Yuexin Ma
11/17/2015 06:06:10 pm
Elizabeth, from what I have observed, there are several functional bins on campus. For instance, the bins near printers are used to collect mixed paper. Maybe you can use the existing bins and take advantage of the rest of the money to carry out your idea of advertising campus events or the clubs that inspire environmental benefits. It's a great idea to combine the clubs with this proposal. With the help of the clubs, I believe the project will run more smoothly.
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Brenna R
11/13/2015 01:45:06 pm
I am proposing a Bridgewater State Community Garden. The money from the Hot Cup’s grant will buy general plot space, advertising, and a garden share for the Hot Cup. Bridgewater State organizations, students and faculty, as well as campus partners, local businesses, Bridgewater public schools, and local families can annually purchase shares and plant their own fruits, vegetables, flowers, and foliage. The money raised by plot share purchases will go to an end of the year harvest feast where the community will gather and participate in a celebration and dinner to enjoy their own organically grown food.
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Deanna
11/16/2015 03:33:24 pm
Brenna -- I really love your idea for the community garden and harvest. I think you have a pretty good idea of your audience, but I would play on the benefits (community bonding) even more. Aside from that, this is a seriously creative, fun approach to the project. I guess the only other thing I would consider is the maintenance of the garden -- "The shareholders will be responsible for growing their own products and will have the choice of how to use their own products." How will you get the local companies, schools, etc interested? They have to come to campus to tend to a small garden? I just wonder if it will be worth it to them. I almost chose to propose a community garden, but I don't know enough about these kinds of programs to write a lot about it. I think you tackled it well, and you have a really great idea to start off with. The festival especially would be a great way to create connections between BSU students and the community.
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